Dear Professor Blackstone,
My name is Khrishnathan S/O Ravindran, though you may simply
call me Nathan. It is my pleasure to write this formal introductory letter to
you. Currently, I am pursuing a Bachelor's Degree with Honors in Mechanical
Engineering at the Singapore Institute of Technology, following my prior
attainment of a Diploma in Aeronautical Engineering at Singapore Polytechnic.
My passion for the world of engineering can be traced to my
love for planes. Since young, I have been enamoured with how man harnessed the
ability to fly, and I have since been in pursuit of the goal to be amongst one
of the few to reach the stars. Through that journey, I came to realise that I
am always keen on seeking out the unknown, never wavering in any challenge that
it may entail. Nothing good ever comes easy is something that I truly believe
and show in my work, hoping one day it will lead me to my dreams. This interest
led me to enrol in this programme, believing that it can further boarded my
knowledge and abilities in the realm on engineering.
My area of weakness would be my inability to articulate my
thoughts effectively. I tend to swallow my thoughts, stammer in front of crowds
and not be able to project my opinions clearly for others to understand. Sometimes
my mind can be filled with thoughts, only for my tongue to be twisted. I
believe my lack of confidence may be a key reason to my problem, something I hope
to learn and overcome in your class.
In your class, I have set several objectives for
self-improvement. Firstly, I aim to enhance my ability to communicate my ideas
coherently, ensuring that my message is easily comprehensible to others.
Additionally, I aspire to bolster my confidence in presentation skills,
preparing myself for future engagements with clients and stakeholders. Hopefully
one day, I can speak without fear, whilst amongst the stars.
Through this letter, I hope you have gained a better
understanding of who I am. I eagerly anticipate your class and the opportunity
to learn under your guidance.
Best Regards,
Khrishnathan
Comments Given:
- Kristine
- Deviesh
- Yong Kiat
Hi Nathan, it was a pleasure to read your introduction letter. Overall I would say that your introduction letter was well written and it went into great details on your passion, interests as well as goals. I really liked how you mentioned about your unwavering mindset and will take on any challenge that may come your way. If I were to point out any flaw in your letter, it would be to expand more on why you would want to improve. Overall, the letter was still very well written, I hope you are able to achieve the goals you have set for yourself for this module and hope you reach the stars one day!
ReplyDeleteNice passion for planes, I also pursued Aerospace Engineer back in my Polytechnic days because planes piqued my interest then compared moving machines. I felt that the short presentation you gave during class was impressive, your tone, articulation, body posture. It shows how confident you are. Do not belittle yourself. It would be nice if you can share more about your strength so that people can get to know you better.
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ReplyDeleteDear Nathan,
ReplyDeleteThis is a finely crafted, informative etter. I especially appreciate learning about your interest in planes and yearning for the stars and how you realized that a ME degree might help make that happen.
You also do a good job breaking down your comm skills and connecting those needs to your goals.
Your language use is well done in this letter but there are some minor issues:
1. ambiguity in expression
-- ...This interest led me to enrol in this programme, believing that it can further boarded my knowledge. > ("can further boarded'') ?
2. overuse of caps
-- Best Regards, > ?
I look forward to interacting more with you this term.
Best wishes,
Brad